Slain 14, 1942.

Mr. Lloyd Elliott,
&. Le Mendenhall, Inc.,
Kansas City, Missouri. rs

Dear Lloyd:
I am most grateful for your splendid patriotic
booklet. I have found so much of codified patriotic

value in it that I scarcely have the heart to criticize |
at all. +

In fact, I flunked the flag quiz completely. And
I think the presidential information most valuable. I
have often wished for just such a thing as this brochure
which is a shorteut to forgotten or misplaced information.
Tm all, it is both a timely and datighetud publication.

But may I suggest just this in point of criticism:
Your Foreword is weak. It lacks punch. First, your open-
ing sentence would be strengthened by beginning with your

now dangling phrase, "regardless of the oc@asion.” Trans-
pose this and see if you don’t find a strengthened thought.

Second, in your series of bold-type sentences immed-
- dately following your opening sentence, I think that one
of the two last sentences is wmecessary. They overlap in
thought. America in business is at work. Why don't you
~~ for these bold-relicf sentences this trio:

America at play :
America in business

Anerica at war

Merely as a suggestion, I should try something like
this:
America at play is honest and aggressive.
America in business is intelligent and

ingenuous.
America at war is hard-hitting and triumphant.